Jasmine Hart

Hi. I can't log in to YWS through the main page-it says there's an error when I just go to youngwriterssociety.com-I can only get in by going to a specific ...

You will always have self-doubt. It can actually be useful because it pushes you to polish your pieces and means you're better able to take constructive criticism. The only time ...

This flows well as a whole and progresses nicely from beginning to end. I think the constant repetition is too much- it gets wearisome and doesn't really add anything to ...

I love this. The first sentence is great. I love; "their red fissure breaking bare" and "ripen into carcasses". It flows very well and the end is powerful. My only ...

Hi. I really like; "Half him and half her course through my veins They are there My hair, my blood, my short fingernails They are me." After this point, I ...

Hi. Congrats on your first poem! I hope you keep it up. You stuck closely to the form- I believe that any lack of elaboration, or any tendancy towards repetition ...

Hi. I love and adore this. It flows perfectly, and your language and imagery is beautiful. I especially liked; "newborn rainbow", "dirt from dying things" and "blissful drunken season". I ...

Hi June. I really enjoyed this. Your imagery's lovely. I especially liked; "In a flurry of pages". Stanza two is perfect- the flow is flawless, and again the imagery is ...

Hi again, Critique number two, as per your request. I think it's much better now. I have two final tips for you; the first is to kepe to one tense. ...

So pretty! :)

Robert Frost's "Selected Poems". So good!

The first thing I'd do is read "Page after page" by Heather Sellers-it has a really good chapter on blocks and being scared to write. I always go back to ...

Going on holidays tommorow until August 18th. Will magically reappear in a little over a month. :) Slan go foil. (Goodbye)

Hi. This is a fresh and interesting piece. I'd begin it earlier, at least with Tom's entrance into the shop and his impression of it, if not before then. As ...

Hi Clau. I really shouldn't attempt to critique your poetry as I always love it too much. Oh well. I'll give it a shot... I love the first stanza. The ...